Poem Analysis Peer Review (Nancy) / blog 60

What went well:

Nancy's poem analysis is written in an organized structure, with an introduction paragraph, three body paragraphs and a conclusion paragraph. There's an topic sentence in each paragraph that clearly explains the main idea of it, and the analysis part (evidences and opinions) are logically organized. I like the hook in the start of the introduction paragraph “Have you ever learned about the magic of the nature? Have you ever been a friend with a tree? A tree may be able to be your soulmate”, because I have never imagine to have a soulmate like a tree, and I have never expected a tree to talk and share ideas with me. She successfully used the hook to catch my attention, and gives me the desire to read the rest of the paper. In the analysis paragraphs, she organised them logically with the meaning of the poem in the first body paragraph, and how the form of the poem helps understanding in the next two paragraphs. She briefly talks about the meaning of content, and spends more words on the literary techniques the poet used in the poem. She did a really good job on listing the figurative languages used in the poem. Every sentence in the paper is clear to read and understand for me, and I really appreciate the organization. Her concluding paragraph is paraphrasing the whole paper.

Even Better If:

The paper is in a very organised structure, and in my opinion it will even be better if she could add some more analysis about the meaning of the poem and to have more connection between the figurative languages and the meaning of the poem. I think it is important to let the readers of the paper know what the poem is about, and how did the speaker used writing techniques to express it, rather than how well the figurative languages were used in the poem. It is an analysis of the meaning of the poem and not simply just listing the techniques. It might be better to have a brief summary of the poem in the first body paragraph, telling the readers what is going on, and then some deeper explanation of what the author want to express based on your own understanding after reading it for a lot of times. In the second last paragraph, she said that “ In the last stanza, the rhyme scheme is the "er" sound”. I think “rhyming” is a better word choice than “rhyme scheme” in this sentence, because a rhyme scheme is a pattern of rhyming words at the end of each sentence. I think Nancy could also work on her conclusions too, because it seems to be only paraphrasing the paper. It might be better if she could have some opinions about the poem and the meaning of it, and make some connection between the poem and some wider things (such as the world). Also just a tiny detail, she could work on her ending sentences in the end of each paragraph to make a smoother transition between different topics and ideas. She doesn't have any direct quote in this paper, and I think using those will help the reader to understand the meaning a lot.